Place and Time Workshop

Noah had a personal essay

Kiana had vignettes

They were both great pieces of writing that were basically done and just needed some touching up. I love how much description and good use of terms there was in their papers, and how they incorporated their style, while keeping the reading feeling intimate with their life. My paper is not near as finished as there so when im working on finishing it tonight I will keep in mind how their papers grasped my attention and try to mimic that strategy in my own writing

For Noah and Kiana both I would just stress that grammar and spelling check. They could lose a few points for having misspelled words or grammar and I dont want that to be the reason they get a score lower than they deserve. :)